Sarah
@selford.bsky.social
Collector of yarn (occasionally knitting or crocheting), Writer of fantasy, sci-fi and paranormal stories, Seller of esoteric giftware. Adopter of cats (see 'lil Barry as my profile pic).
You might consider removing 'have to' and take out any emotion on that first line. Then it would just be a factual statement and would leave the question 'how does she feel about this?' Happy, relieved, sad, angry?
Then put all of the emotional impact into a subsequent line or paragraph.
Then put all of the emotional impact into a subsequent line or paragraph.
April 5, 2025 at 7:23 PM
You might consider removing 'have to' and take out any emotion on that first line. Then it would just be a factual statement and would leave the question 'how does she feel about this?' Happy, relieved, sad, angry?
Then put all of the emotional impact into a subsequent line or paragraph.
Then put all of the emotional impact into a subsequent line or paragraph.
I agree. That's why she's the MC and hero of the story. But I do love Kenneth's point of view.
April 1, 2025 at 3:39 PM
I agree. That's why she's the MC and hero of the story. But I do love Kenneth's point of view.
I love twists on mythology!
February 12, 2025 at 8:46 AM
I love twists on mythology!
Love the name (I live in Suffolk UK). Nice pitch and great hook
January 24, 2025 at 5:58 PM
Love the name (I live in Suffolk UK). Nice pitch and great hook
Love the colour gradient on your moodboard! Perfect with the wording of your pitch.
January 24, 2025 at 2:29 PM
Love the colour gradient on your moodboard! Perfect with the wording of your pitch.