You have been super helpful, thank you so much!

How could I clearly say they showed up at prom unexpectedly? Tracked me down? Crashed prom?

How about I write: parents chasing her to prom? Or if you suggest a clearer more concise version?

Another version here:
Iranian-American life with intense parents means being afraid to shave your legs listening to Paula Abdul, prom car chases & hijab arguments. Can Shadi navigate family expectations, cultural contradictions and multiple worlds to discover what Iranian and American means to her?

What if I made the last sentence:

Can Shadi navigate family expectations, chaotic cultural contradictions and multiple worlds to discover what Iranian American means to her?

What do you all think?

Any feedback on this one:
9-year-old Zayda, an Iranian American with BIG ideas, is told she is "too much." Her F in English where she abhors structure threatens her place in after-school play group perfect for her Zayda-ness. Can she learn that making room for others' gifts is a gift to herself too?

Love it 💛 thank you so much!

I feel that too. I reposted again and welcome your thoughts!

Thank you! I reposted using your template! Would love your feedback!

Thank you so much! Would it be helpful if I changed the question in the end to something like: can she learn that structure doesn't have to kill her creativity and use that lesson to help bring her grade up?

How exciting! I messaged you on Instagram as well.

Hello! So great to meet you! What project are you working on? I would love to support you! This is great feedback. I will rewrite one again tomorrow and would love your feedback again!

Hello, I'm not sure if I didn't get feedback on my pitches today because I was counted as a volunteer. I am unagented and shared 2 pitches today. I would love feedback! I will try again tomorrow!