There are two things that sprung to my eye that could be improved.

- One, the word "swear" in the last part of chapter 4 was repeated twice in the same line.

- Two, it'd likely make the text easier to read if you could split the paragraphs whenever the speaker of the dialogue changes.

Thanks for publishing this work. Especially enjoyed the part with the statues in chapter 3.

From my experience, using boxes with many lines of chat messages where major parts of the work aren't chat, can make it easier to read. The same goes for system windows in litrpgs. But if it's every other line in the story or only very short text, then it can be done without.

Maybe having a story that's planned to run for a longer time like a year or two, where you release something new every few weeks or months could help? At least from what I see, persistence combined with large projects seem to help with visibility.
Even then, luck is still a major factor.

If you're worried about the changes on Discord you could try other platforms or host your own server (fluxer, matrix, stoat, etc.). But there's downsides to consider such as smaller communities and costs. Maybe there's other writers/artists who already host their own server you could ask?

Using the exclude parameter on itch helps filter out VN BL games:

itch.io/games/top-ra...

Unfortunately, you can only add one tag, so the list of results contains interactive fictions and other VN like genres. Still, better than nothing.